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Err... hello.

I'm new here. So... hi. I saw that no one seemed to have reported this... ((I hope. Unless it's one of those magical deleted-comes back to life fics.)) So here goes my first Sue-reporting... ever...

 

Story Or Series Title: Integra's daughter
Fandom: HELLSING. WTFNO.
Culprit Author's Name: bloodrose666 ((Apparently she's written sue fics in the past??))

Full Name (plus titles if any): Integral Hellsing and Angelina Van Hellsing
Full Species(es): Human and a dhampir... thing.
Hair Color (include adjectives): Integral: see manga/anime Angelina: "long black as night hair"
Eye Color (include adjectives): Integral: see manga/anime Angelina: Couldn't find it... but then I only skimmed it.
Unusual Markings/Colorations: N/A
Special Possessions (if any): Integral: Hellsing estate... Alucard, "strange robes and a large fancy staff." Angelina: Tight black tanktop, black baggy jeans, black and red rollerblades... Alucard's ba- love. Oh, and a crappy motorcycle...

Annoying Origin: sappy!Integral: author's mind Angelina: sappy!Integral
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: sappy!Integral: is one. Angelina: sappy!Integral's daughter
Annoying Special Abilities: Controlling darkness. And crap.
Other Annoying Traits: Existing.

Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:

Finally she reached the last room. The door was old and wooden but across it was drawn a strange sigil. It seemed as if it was a spell to keep something in. She slowly walked to the door and placed her hand on the doorknob. The visions came again. This time it was her mother standing in front of the man that was in her last vision.

He was restrained by silver shackles. He was struggling against them a look of pure malice and a bti of sorrow Because Alucard is just emotional and hormonal like that. and bewilderment like he had been betrayed shown in his red eyes. Her mother stood in front of him with a book open in her hand. She was dressed in strange robes and carried a lareg fancy staff.

“Why are you doing this master!”?

Because the organization is over and it is too dangerous to let you run free.”

She began chanting a spell. HE growled at her and pulled on the shackles that were burning his skin.

“I will not let you let you lock me up again! I will not allow it! I will never be freedonce this is over. Your cursing me to hell! I won't let you!" No, of course you won't. Now be a good boy and go to bed for ETERNITY!! MUAHAHA!! Ahem... yes.

HE snapped the chains and lunged at her, his fangs bared. She lifted her hand and looked him in the eye as he came at her. There where tears in her eyes.He saw them and his face cahnged from anger to utter confusion.

“I am sorry. My the prince of darkness by chained!”

Bolts of light wrapped around him as he stopped in mid air. They coiled around him as he screamed. His hair became long and white as the spell striped him of his power. His body fell with a thud as his screams echoed through the halls. He lay motionless, as her mother looked down at him the tears dripping from her chin.

“I am sorry Alucard, my old friend, but it had to be done. I am so sorry.”

An older man walked up behind her and put a hand on her shoulder. She turned to him and nodded her head. He handed her a handkerchief from his pocket to dry her eyes with. She pushe dit away. She turned to the men behind her.

“Carry him into the cell.”

The men did as she asked. She watched as they put him in and locked the door. AS they left she walked to the door and placed her hand on it.

“You will be released again when you are needed. But it won’t be by me. Good bye Alucard.”

Mom…Alucard…Why? She brought her hand to her eyes. When she drew it back she found her tears were red. It was the first time in a long time that she had cried red tears since she was a child. She stared at the door. Her mother was crying. Yeah, cause ya know... THE WOMAN OF STEEL ALWAYS CRIES. A lot. All the time. Duh. She must have cared for him. It saddedned her. She could tell they were close. It must have nearly broke her heart to do that to him.

She slowly swung her legs over the side of the bed. Her eyesight cleared and she noticed that Alucard wasn’t wearing his normal clothes. He was wearing his coat but he wasn’t wearing the suit. HE was wearing the black shirt and black jeans she had gotten for him. The shirt was tight to his body so it showed off all his muscle. The pants were a bit baggy easily covering the boots he always wore. He didn’t look half bad.

“Your wearing the clothes I got you. OMG, you totally make my gawthy-Sue-y black heart QUIVER!wtf. MARRY ME, OMGWTF.

“I found they were quite comfortable. I like the style.”

“It looks good on you.”

“Thank you.”

 

Yeah... uhh... what ever happened to the Alucard who killed people just because he could? It makes me sad. Stupid Sue-y clone things. D=  'Kay, I'm done. Bye.

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